it was my first day at the university. carrying bags of luggage, i walked slowly into the dormitory building. i looked door after door for my name. at last i found it. in the room, there was already a girl making her bed.
smiling shyly, she greeted me with 'how do you do'.then, she continued her work, paying no more attention to me.'what a stuck up fellow', i thought. then i began to examine the room. it was no different from any other room i had seen.but it had been thoroughly cleaned by my new roommate, no doubt.
minutes later, i started to examine her. she was thin, short and dark. her hair was in a completely disastrous mess like a bunch of straw. her dirty clothes and tired look were clearly signs of a long journey. well, her 2'shirt was too big for her and her trousers were a bit short, which made her look funny.furthermore, she wore a pair of rubber scandals, which were indeed out of fashion. in a word, she did not look like a smart freshman at all. 'a yokel', i concluded.
the second time she spoke, her accent told me that she was from the south. 'shall i help you to get your luggage from the ground floor?' i did not refuse since i really needed help. wow!she was quick in action. before i said 'thanks', she had already walked out of the room and was soon far ahead of me.
'a good guy,' i said to myself, 'i will make friends with her. 'i hurried and caught up with her.

简 评
本文作者通过细致的观察和生动的语言，使一个淳朴少女的形象跃然纸上。作者叙述了上大学的第一天对室友的第一印象。有外表的描写：黝黑瘦弱矮小、头发像一团乱草堆、穿着不合身的衣裤和过时的凉鞋。由此，作者得出的结论是她是个“乡巴佬”。有语言的描写：'how do you do'，'shall l help you to get your luggage from theground floor?'，虽然言语不多，但读者能感受到这是一个热心善良的女孩。还有行动的描写：整理完自己的床铺后，帮作者搬行李，表现出她勤劳淳朴的一面。因此，作者最终产生了要和她交朋友的想法。本文字数不多，情节简单，但作者成功地塑造了室友的形象：身材矮小，但有着高大的形象；衣着过时，但有一颗美丽的心灵，与作者相成了强烈的对比。作者对语言的运用自如，有扎实的语言功底。文章读来没有晦涩生硬之感。
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